Finish the story off with an ending
It must be 10-20 sentence long
It must be 10-20 sentence long
Imagine that you are sitting in the crowd at the opening ceremonies for the Rio Olympics this August. The ceremony has just started and all of the Olympic athletes are parading around the stadium in their uniforms when all of a sudden… When some more people came and they were bad people as the athletes are starting a prson spots them as the bad people sat down the person yelled out a criminal and all the people freaked out and started yelling. Also one person was on the speaker saying dont panic everything is going to be fine. And then the cops arrive and milions of people left and when the they heard the cops they were going back to sit down as the cops said '' Remain Cal everythings going to be alright''. Then That is when the sriminals got arrested and the criminals went to jail and all the people were alright. Also noone got hurt. Ad the athletes carried o as the police cars drove away.
Hi Elizabeth.
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing this story here on your blog. Its was a bit of a nail biter as it made me nervous to read ... I didn't know what was going to happen next. How frightening would that be to be in a crowed when that terror broke out.
Glad you ended it positively and no one got hurt. Thanks for that.
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Hi Elizabeth. Great to see you taking part in the Summer Learning Journey. Did you find the new tasks? I suppose that's why you have to queue up for ages and get your bags checked before you go into sporting events like at Eden Park.
ReplyDeleteHi Elizabeth. My name is Ronan Wai Leung from Ohaeawai Primary School. This is an amazing story and I loved how you used some juicy words in your story. I loved how you explained the story, it made me think I was right there. Have you thought about putting a few more full stops and not so many, and the. Loved your story bye.
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ReplyDeleteMy name is Charlie Jo from Ohaeawai Primary. I think it is wonderful that you did the Summer Learning Journey. I did Summer Learning Journey too but did not get that far. I like your story because it was frightening at the beginning but everything turns out all right. I think that you should tell us what kind of writing it is. From Charlie Jo
Hi, my name is Sam Weston. I am from Ohaeawai school. You have just a little mistake it is not in Rio this year it is in Tokyo. I really like it though - it is so cool. Blog you later.
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